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Subject: Tailor in NYC
Hi there, hope all is well. I am reaching out to see if you want to schedule a consultation with us. As you likely know, Alteration Specialists of NY is a 5 star, full-service tailoring company in New York City.

Our tailors have experience altering items for men and women (suits, dresses, leather, bridal, etc). We have 2 locations: 1) Union Square (89 Fifth Ave. & 17th St) and 2) Uptown (445 Park Ave & 57th St.).

We also provide in-home / office consultations - just schedule an appointment on our website. You can review our website or you can search us on the web with the keyword, Alteration Specialists of NY. This Inbox is Not Monitored. There is an unsubscribe option below.

Best Regards,
Rachel Gross
Alteration Specialists
89 Fifth Ave.
New York | NY |10003
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Subject: Alex, need a tailor in NYC?
Hi Alex, 
Came across your linkedin profile and it looks like you might wear a lot of suits as Chief Marketing Officer of InspireBeats.

My name is Rachel and I am reaching out to see if you want to schedule a consultation with us. Alteration Specialists is a 5 star, full-service tailoring company located in Union Square, actually just a couple stops from your office. We also provide in-home and office consultations.

Do you have any suits or clothes that need altering? I know lots of people put it off - happy to pass you over some pricing docs, just let me know!
Best Regards,
-Rachel